A long gone friend – short contest story
You stopped looking for me long back, but I am still in hope that someday you will come over asking for me. Someday you will look outside your window in search of me, but alas! my hopes are slowly diminishing. Seated in my little abode, I keep wondering what has changed you so much. You used to be so happy, full of life but now I feel sad when I see you.
You must be wondering who I am?
I am a little bird ‘Sparrow’- in your childhood you used to be so happy seeing me flying in and out your house. Your mother always kept some water in a vessel for me, which was good enough for me. Indefinite times, I did my breakfasts or lunches with your family. The granite slab kept in your kitchen garden was supposedly the place where I used to find food for my self. I was a part of your family.
You not only fed me but also gave me a home, my cute little nest, to live in. It was a project for your summer vacations to prepare a bird’s nest. You really enjoyed the task and under the guidance of your parents, with a child like dedication, you collected each and every twig, leaf, grass strand – assembled it all into a beautiful nest all through your vacation. Yours was the best in your class. When class teacher returned everyone’s nests; you brought home yours and placed it in between the branches of the bougainvillea in your kitchen garden. I didn’t miss a chance. Next morning when you curiously looked into the nest, you found me resting with my wings covering my face. Out of excitement, you screamed, for a moment I got shocked and fluttered away from the nest but then I came back because I knew you simply couldn’t control your emotions being a child.
I laid my eggs in the nest gifted by you. When my chicks hatched out; you daily watched me feeding them. It was your innocence that you started putting huge quantity of food on that granite slab. You thought that I need more to feed my babies. That was so nice of you. First time I flew out with my babies, you were happier than me.
It was all going fine but gradually you got so busy, in your quest to become somebody important in this world. I always prayed for your success, my prayers were heard; you got a very good job, handsome salary, in fact, all that you wanted to posses. You became so materialistic with the time that you forgot the eternal happiness we both got from each other.
That’s why I flew away from the abode you gifted me; to my disappointed you never ever even noticed it. The bougainvillea also no longer exists in your kitchen garden. You uprooted it to make space for parking your car. The cell phone you use, their signals affect me negatively. Me and my friends are slowly disappearing, destined to get extinct soon.
I wish all you humans start caring, in reality, about species like ours… so that we can co-exist. Ask yourself…. When was the last time you saw me? A little vulnerable bird Sparrow, does anyone care about us?
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I am Rohit… I write because I find it challenging. It takes a lot to put the right words in the right order to express the right feelings. By profession I am a Technical writer.
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A very sweet story which is very much true in itself. The story took us to our childhood when we use to enjoy such small small things. They made us laugh and they made us happy. Nowadays, we all are involved in so much materialistic world that we have forgotten what such things felt like.
Very well done Rohit.
This is an exceptional piece of writing.
You have been able to jot down things so efficiently.
keep up the good work.
Good Work Rohit, very well thought of topic and writing.
vERY WELL NARRATED…
WAS REALLY MOVING AND TOUCHED ME DEEP WITHIN.
I WOULD HAVE OTHERWISE NEVER THOUGHT ABOUT THE LITTLE SPARROW.
kEEP UP THE GOOD WORK OF ENLIGHTENING
Wow I’m so impressed! Good work Rohit, keep up the writing… it takes some skills to write something so touching like this.
Amazing piece of writing Rohit, its smething we all know but never paid any attention to our emotion
itz again applaudable.
Hey..loved the story and so true that we have lost the ability to appreciate little things thats used to make us happy and we in fact now frown upon people who enjoy such things, calling them childish.I for one am happy that i still find beauty in all these little things and dont mind being called a kid …i loved having bhutta few back back after a very long time and you wont believe i was happy having such a humble corn…hope this will stay in me
This is really a great story.
Very well written man…
The great thought in simple words put together… The message is pretty clear as well as language is good.
Keep writing man…
Cheers,
Gaurav Kumar Anand.
hhey rohit,
i loved reading the entire piece… lovely and so true…
it was surely so so so refreshing to read and i visualized each and every thing you wrote..
lovely and i do want you to pen down more…
take care
Indeed a very impressive and touching, I truly liked it and as a matter of fact, I found it as “The best one” of your work till date I have read. Keep it going this way. All the best!!!
Great effort!!!
excellent….its a really touching piece of thought , very nicely put into words that glue together to portray the vivid picture in the reader’s mind….an absolute treat….:-)
Sweet and simple! Very well written Rohit. Loved it.
Very Impressive and Touching!
Hello,
You really do have a way with words and articulate it well.
Keep the creativity flowing in.
Cheers
nice work
hi rohit
u touched a topic which is so relevant……we’ve lost one very precious thing while competing in this blind race……n that is our innocence………thx for reminding it through ur story……..
hi Rohit,
I love the simplicity with which u penned down such a touching and long forgotten topic.
All the best
A nice and Touching Story… A bit of more emphasis on later part might have given more awareness among the readers.
But indeed its a good story.
Hey Rohit,
Lovely concept,the weaving of threads from the sparrow’s emotions to rat race issues, to the problem of cell phone radiation etc…
Another good thing is that it did not sound verbose and was an easy read… Keep writing mate.
Hi Rohit..
Gr8 thought..Right words at the ryt place wd appropriate meaning. Good to see that people still think about natural beauty thse days.
Keep writing like this and I hope that after reading your story, people will become more responsible towards the environment in which they are living.
hi rohit. amazing story. truly reflects life of the masses. do support your point that one must not forget the inner joy in way to glory and success. without it, the goals (success) we desire will get lost.
Very well written…expressed such a simple idea so very beautifully..keep going
excellent….its a really touching thought
very well written rohit
I liked the story, its touching ,simple, very much true and nicely written.
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